“Don’t use that word! It’s offensive!”
Welcome to my website, detailing the adventures of Captain Esek Hrelle, his family, and the crew and cadets of his starship, the USS Surefoot. These stories are set in the 2360-70s, the Next Generation/DS9/Voyager Era.
When I wrote the first story, The Universe Had Other Plans, in the far off distant year of 2016, I never intended it to be a "first" story of anything. It was meant to be a one-off, a means of helping me fight writer's block on another project. I am amazed and delighted that it has taken on a life of its own, with an extended family of characters, places, ships and events.
The column on the right hand side groups the stories chronologically by significant events in Captain Hrelle's life (such as the command of a new Surefoot), as well as major events in the Star Trek timeline. The column on the left hand side lists reference articles, one-off stories, and a link to stories set on the USS Harken, a ship from decades before but with ties to the Surefoot Universe.
The universe of Star Trek belongs to CBS/Paramount; all of the original characters here belong to me. There is no explicit sexual content, but there are instances of profanity, violence and discussions of adult subject matters and emotional themes; I will try to offer warnings on some of the stories, but sometimes I forget.
I love comments (I don't get paid for this, sadly), so feel free to write and let me know what you think!
Friday, 2 August 2019
Sreenity
“Don’t use that word! It’s offensive!”
Great story! I cried at the loss of Kami. And I’m sure there might be more about this occupation. Weynik wouldn’t have left his adopted family alone to fight the Ferasans. Anyways, you did well, very well, with this story!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jack! I cried while I was writing it. It had affected so much that I had delayed finishing it until now. Strange, to have such reactions to unreal characters.
DeleteAs for the Occupation, there are plans...
I am curios, How do you see Hrelle? I see D'Sefet as a true alter-ego, actually ME when I take my "Human Suit" off.
DeleteHi DSefet! In many ways, Hrelle is my Alter Ego. Physically he's fatter (and obviously furrier), psychologically he's a lot more confident and mature and less self-centred, and more successful in his role as husband than I ever was. If he was being depicted outside of print, I would want to see him and the Surefoot universe CGI'd, and he would be voiced by John Goodman.
DeleteDude. You freaking slayed me! Some powerful, emotional stuff. I cried too. I've cried writing scenes for my own work a time or two (or more), and there is not a thing wrong with that, or caring about these characters. They may be fictional, but they are as real to those of us that create them as any other person we meet. We give them names and lives and loves and hates...just like we have.
ReplyDeleteAnd OMG, Sasha and Meow got together???
Thanks, Christina! I had heads turning turning my lunch breaks, with people seeing me wiping my face as I sat in front of my laptop, writing... and I'm glad I'm not the only one who gets emotionally attached to their characters.
DeleteAnd I had originally planned on Sasha falling for the Caitian nanny that the Hrelles will be getting (spoilers!), but it was Jack who suggested Meow Rrori. Now, as to the circumstances behind their having a child together, well, that'll be a story for another day... literally LOL
OMG! This is the most intense and emotional story I think you've written yet. Forcing Esek to face not only the (heartbreaking) death of Kami but to have to deal with a special needs child who's trying to venture out on there own, very well written. And the dark hints at the occupation only make me wonder with both anticipation and dread at what happened.
ReplyDeletePersonal note: I'm a nurse that works with special needs patients, severe autism/intellectual disability/etc., and having had to see some the looks other people give them when we take them out, I want to say thank you for the poster at the end of Sreen. We've lost count of the number of times we've seen the looks and just know what these tail-chasers are thinking, but can't do anything about it.
P.S. Does this now mean we get The Sex Pistols and The Ramones references? LOL
Thank you, David, for your wonderfully kind words, they mean so much to me :-)
DeleteThis was indeed one of my most intense and emotional stories. It was difficult to look on this period in my character's life, having to endure what I put him through. And the Occupation is an event I do intend to detail in the normal timeline.
And I thank you for your appreciation of the end poster. It was important (and will continue to be important) that Sreen not be seen as my token disabled character in Surefoot, someone to be pitied or patronised, and that the attitudes that other characters should show her are what we should also show in the here and now.
Will there be any Sex Pistols references? I don't know. My mind is Pretty Vacant at the moment...
I'll be honest that was the one thing that slightly concerned me with your previous revelation of Sreen's potential (at the time) condition... at least until I remembered how brilliantly you handled Jonas' suicide attempt and the similar issues faced by Esek, Kit and Eydiir, then I realised you'd probably be fine with it all.
DeleteThe "PROBLEM" most humans have with the disabled our natural reaction of pity. I have a real friend/realitive's realitive like Sreen. Through a accident at birth he was afflicted Cerebral palsy. He had MANY operations to unknot his muscles and had to wear braces on his legs. He was always falling and bouncing back up laughing! My memory of him is Me, my brother, his brothers and cousins running through the fields on his grandfather's farm and Steve, laughing, falling, bringing up the rear. He was interested in recording and sound so I made him the hero in one of my stories as a highly regarded researcher in the field of sound and acoustics.
DeleteHI Tre_ZEN! Thanks for reading and commenting! I'm glad that my depiction of the characters' various conditions and trials was successful, knowing how so easily they can go wrong in other hands...
DeleteHi again DSefet! Yes, even as I have only just begun to write about Sreen's disability in the "current" timeline, I felt an urge to show her as an adult with a disability, displaying the ferocity and strength her mother saw in her spirit. She wasn't someone to be pitied or patronised or coddled. She had a disability, but to her, So F**king What? And it's terrific that you immortalised Steve in your fictional world as a tribute to him :-)
DeleteI was wondering what rules you used in imaging Shalom?
ReplyDeleteHi again DSefet! ALthough Shalom is half-human, I pictured him as appearing all Caitian, except perhaps with a stubbier muzzle than most; his human traits would be mostly interior
DeleteBy making Shalom mostly Caitian I think you might have robbed yourself of a few plot lines. A LONG time ago (I have been writing these stories off and on for almost a quarter of a century.) I wrote a story on MY other series. This series explores the civilian side of space in the Logs of the Starfreighter, S.S. Hanford. There I am a human and the "Ship's Cat" is a female felinoid.
DeleteIn the story Capt'n Don is contracted to transport a Half human, half Caitian orphan of the Dominion War back to his mother's father on Cait. I introduced Tom as:
The orphan we are discussing is a half human, half Caitian male, five years old. His father was a human Starfleet officer, missing in action. His mother was a Caitian civilian engineer, taken prisoner by the Dominion and presumed dead. The reason I’m being told all this? He needs transportation to his grandparents on Cait. His overall body shape and height was average humanoid, although he was on the thin side (but then Caitians and Felinoids in general tend to be slenderly built). He was as furless as a human, where one could see his skin poking through the arm and leg openings of an all to small pair of coveralls. The amount and shape of the hair on his head had a lion-like mane look to it. Poking through the mane at the side of the head, a little farther up than where human ears are, were the traditionally triangular shaped cats-ears. His face had the angular appearance of a cat, the nose and mouth combined like a cat and he had whiskers. Probably his most striking and compelling feature were his eyes. Even though they had the felinesque, oval pupils, they showed such a sadness, a sadness that only human eyes can show. In an instant he was in front of us. One arm, ending in five VERY sharped clawed fingers clutching one of each of our legs in a death grip! As they walked away, Tom still clinging to I’Aisha’s leg, I see a bobbed, furless tail protruding from a slit in the rear of Tom’s overalls.
In the end Tom's Grandfather:
Sitting in one of the chairs in front of the massive desk is a thin, scraggly coated, slightly stooped male Caitian. Like most felines, it was genetically advantageous NOT to show if you were sick or old so, unlike humans their outward appearance doesn’t change as they age. There are no wrinkles or gray hair. However, sometimes if they are very old or chronically sick, they will let their fur go ungroomed. It appears this is what has happened in Tom’s grandfather case. After we are seated, M’Serrvnt begins, “These are the onesss that have been carring forrr yourrr daughter’s Kit.”. I see the old cat’s ears flatten against his skull as he rises from his chair, his anger magnified by the pain in his bones. “The Kit isss a Halfcat”, Tom’s grandfather states, “I have NO daughterrr, there ISss NO daughter’s ssson!”.
Well, as it was indicated in the story, Shalom's outward appearance may be Caitian, but his human side is there, and gives him some advantages.
DeleteAs to the idea of conflict within mixed-species characters, it's my own personal feeling that the subject in Trek has been already thoroughly explored, through characters such as Spock, K'Ehleyr, Alexander, B'Elanna and others. In my depiction of Cait in this future period, Caitians will have fully embraced Sasha as a Caitian Matriarch after all these years, so her son will be equally accepted.
I didn't cry for Kami's loss. Instead, my heart stopped when I learned that her Isomorphic Projection wasn't a communication, but an archive. My heart stopped when Esek broke down, begging for forgiveness, for trying to hold onto a memory, to the lost.
ReplyDeleteSreen is bound to be a great character... But for those of us who have a more sensitive nature... Perhaps you should prepare us?
Hi again Linksword2 - I'm sorry if my story was too emotionally overwhelming. It was difficult to judge how much to warn readers about, without revealing spoilers. But I will try to be more thematic with any warnings I put on my stories...
DeleteThis is going to be a little long, so fair warning.
ReplyDeleteAs I commented in another story, I'm going back and rereading the stories to catch up and refresh myself and I kept finding myself coming back to this one for some reason. Then I figured it out, there's 2 things about this one that caught me more than the others.
1) I'm not totally buying Sasha and Rrori, as they've been written so far, being together as a couple. Yes, there is a lot of time to cover between now and then, but so far their relationship has been, to me anyway, slightly more formal, with Sasha even admitting to taking an elderly sister (Shrinna) role with him more than friend/possible lover role. Like I said, what the future brings that could bring them together only you know, so I'll wait and see.
2) While I was in nursing school, I took both a literature and psych class the same semester. It so happened that a paper was due in both classes that i was able to overlap them and use the same one. It was the cliche about how a great hero needs a great villain, and what makes a great villain (Batman/Joker, X-men/Magneto, et al.). You've written some characters that made Esek have to be brave, but not really heroic, since it's easy to be brave when other peoples lives are on the line. In this story though, you wrote perhaps the best villain that Esek could have faced, forcing him to be heroic, and that was himself. When he changed Kami's programming for his own selfish needs and didn't think twice about it, he became his own worst enemy. The talk with Sasha and the fight with Kami before letting her go for the last time still brings tears to my eyes over the raw emotions that were put out there by him.
I must admit that your writing gets better as it goes, especially without any kind of professional team to help you out. I hope you keep improving and putting out great stories.
Thanks for commenting again, Dave, and I am so pleased that you are so come back to this story of mine!
DeleteRegarding the points you raised:
1. I know it might seem a bit of a stretch that Sasha and Rrori might end up a couple, given what we have seen of them so far, though Neraxis and Jonas started out as a big sister/little brother combo as well, and ended up romantically involved. Making it Rrori was a late change, having originally intended to just have a an unknown named in the role.
I might also posit that perhaps Sasha and Rrori aren't in a real relationship, but more like Friends With Benefits, or perhaps they're united only by the child they had produced, intentionally or otherwise. It would make for an interesting story to see how their relationship might have evolved (will evolve?) in the 18 years between "now" and "then"(?)... the tenses are killing me LOL
2. I never thought about the difference between being heroic and being brave, and you're right - it's easy for him to be heroic when there's Klingons or Orions or other external forces to face, to save innocent lives. Our own worst enemies do tend to be ourselves (which was why Kami proved so valuable to him from the start, helping him face the things he couldn't see or wanted to see about himself).
And yes, I intend to continue. There's new characters, new directions, new challenges ahead. I've got years and years of storylines to follow... :-)
So, my comment a while back was that my heart stopped when Esek broke down, begging his wife's hologram for forgiveness, for him trying to hold onto memory of a time stuck in the past, beyond reach and grasp alike. Kami, (seven hells forgive whatever happened to her) slapping the stupid out of Esek for altering the program, if only to hold onto memory. [I laughed a lot at that one, even though my mind fears if my fiance were to do the same thing to me at times.] And although I don't think it kindly to broach such a question.... Can Esek move on? If he did, Kami might come back from the grave and neuter Esek.
ReplyDeleteAs Caitians see it, they never stop loving their partners even after death. That's natural. Nothing will ever change the time they had with those people, any more than the past itself can be changed. There's no point in fighting that. But they are also supposed to recognise that those people remain in the past, and that to wallow in it is to deny all that life has to offer following such loss.
DeleteKami, the real or the holographic one, would encourage Esek to move on, because of this. Had Kami not moved on from the death of her first husband Rmorra years before, she never would have married Esek, had two wonderful cubs together, and had this long and fulfilling chapter in her life.
Restore Kami from computer disk,let her become a medical hologram.
ReplyDeleteHi again, Doctor! While it *might* be possible to restore Kami's personality from the computer and make it a medical hologram, I wonder if it was something that Esek and Kami's family might be able to emotionally handle. I know that in our day and age, we can have the sounds and images of our deceased loved ones around us, but I wonder how much more difficult would it be in the future, to have a hologram that can respond to us like the living version of the deceased person would? Could we have the same problems as Admiral Hrelle had here, reconnecting with this hologram like the real one and unable to move on with their lives?
DeleteI believe a EMH wouldn't require so much emotional function,and they can only run Kami's
Deleteprogram on Surefoot-B,so there wouldn't be such a problem
Lots of people like me have autism,and it brings us lots of problem,but we are not totally disadvantaged.
ReplyDeleteWe are different,but not less
Exactly! As I had Kami say to her father in another story, "Big Star Little Star", "Your granddaughter will always be different from other cubs… but she will never be less than them."
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